Now Know Better

by A Poets Handwriting aka ALISHA   Aug 11, 2012


Has the heart of gold
Acts as though he's so strong
Yet he is so very vulnerable...

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You can fight the truth all you want
No one will know, so your secret is safe
But I finally understand you completely
But I will acknowledge it discreetly

You act as though you're so very tough
And I suppose in some way you are
But your emotions are as strong as all
And are easily your one true downfall

Easily broken because your heart is pure
You invest it all so whole-heartedly
That you can be left in such disrepair
When someone has broken it without care

You act as though your heart is not there
But now I understand the full truth
You fake it so they cannot break it
Because all it would take is one good hit

You love completely, it's a beautiful thing
That it doesn't take much to hurt you inside
One small puncture and you react with rage
Your way of coping the emotional stage

They say; those who love deeply
Are those that hurt deeply; it's true
This saying directly correlates to you!
But you react with rage instead of blues.

You come across as so very strong
But deep inside you're vulnerable
I now know better, I finally realise
This anger is simply just your disguise

Take the pain and turn it into rage
No one need know, so goes the charade
But I now know better, but I won't tell
That all you have is a tough outer shell

By A.Sherden
24/05/12

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  • 12 years ago

    by A Poets Handwriting aka ALISHA

    I never actually thought it would be interpreted as me being angry at the person, but reading over it, I can see where it came from.

    Personally, no, I wasn't angry. I was more, well accepting of this person because I finally realised what was going on internally with this person (my older brother by the way).

    I think perhaps, instead of anger, I was a little sorrowful that he hides his emotion behind anger and such, when there are more appropriate outlets.

    (If any of that makes sense..?!)

    But yes, I do accept him for who he is. He is my brother after all! (:

    Thank you ever so much for reading and commenting.

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    This is an angry poem. Well...really you just want to shake this person into some sort of sense....it annoys you...yeah?

    I liked the fact that you just rhyme in the 3rd and 4th lines of each stanza...somehow it made the anger more apparent?

    You come across as so very strong
    But deep inside you're vulnerable
    I now know better, I finally realise
    This anger is simply just your disguise

    In this stanza you are accepting them for who they are but sill...wanting to shake them?

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Not sure about the title.

    I thought this was quite well-written. However there were some awkward wording like:

    "But your emotions are as strong as all
    And are easily your one true downfall"

    due to forced rhymes.
    It could be rephrased. I'm not sure about the use of 'all' as it is quite clumsy. I'm not much for rhyming lately, but it woupd sound better if you changed it to 'everyone's". You could also rephrase these couple of verses to connect with the previous lines to: For you emotions are as strong as all / but they easily become your downfall.

    Also, the lack of punctuation made the flow jump from time to time.

    Great job on the tone and message though.

  • 12 years ago

    by TSI25

    This one gave me chills, and was very relatable to a number of people ive encountered. several aspects even speak deeply to me which is impressive, as a poets words should speak to everyone. i wouldnt change a god damn thing, absolutely amazing 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    SO BEAUTIFUL Sherden. I loved the smooth rhyming. The piece took my breath away. 5/5

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