Comments : My Solitude

  • 12 years ago

    by Colm

    In this poem too you seem to have a nice understanding of flow and this is one of the better rhyming poems I have seen recently. It has the feel of a old writer looking back on their life, digesting their experiences and putting them to paper.

    The only part where I felt the flow was off was in this line:

    'Enclosed in four walls, I stand by'
    ^^
    It seems like there is a syllable too much in here, maybe you could look over it again. Other than that I thought the rhyme worked. The language was nice and simple and fits the nostalgic tone.

    Well done, keep writing!

    • 12 years ago

      by Lyndy

      Thank you for your critique..your right about the last line in the fourth stanza..i kind of got lost on that part when I wrote this..I really hope to do better next time..your comments inspired me, thank you:)