Comments : Waiting just for a wake up

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Khal,
    I thought this poem was just beautiful!! I think a couple lines need revising in the beginning, "met"..and "slept" sounded a bit off to me.

    However, the imagery was gorgeous...and the part about the feather entering the ink well. I thought that was brilliant. I loved it.

    Very sweet love piece from you my friend :)