Hello, Krysten :]

Typos: first stanza, first line, 'conjur' is supposed to be 'conjure.' I wouldn't really call it a stanza, but the sixth section, with the one line, 'indeference' is supposed to be 'indifference.' Eight stanza, third line, 'finnally' is supposed to be 'finally.' These are just typos that I have discovered. I imagine that these were made from typing too fast :] I do them all the time! I am just trying to help, so you can fix these if you want, or just leave them.

This is an interesting poem. I have read it a few times now, and I think that you are saying that you would rather be broken hearted than not feeling anything? It seems like the love that you felt for this person, or at least the person in the poem, has dwindled or completely snuffed out it seems. At least, that is the impression. You would rather feel something, than nothing, correct? You don't like feeling nothing because maybe it scares you, or is it something else? Perhaps you would rather feel something after all of the stuff you two have been through...many possible answers to this one.

I don't know, I have to disagree with this. I would rather feel nothing than go through heartache, because when I go through it, it feels like I have died ten thousand times over. It is almost unbearable to me...I wouldn't want to go through that more than what I have to :/

Anyway, very interesting poem. I don't know if this is true or not, but I am sorry if it is. There is nothing worse than heartbreak, in my opinion.

Excellent
5/5

~S

It reminds me of a moment in a video game i was just playing where several of the characters were conspiring to make another one emotionless, and rob him of his ability to be happy and in love with this girl. some one says to him "well if you can't feel anything, then you can't rightly feel sad about it, can you?" and he responds "Doesn't that make it so much worse? To be entirely unable to understand what I had lost..."

not sure if thats entirely the same angle youre going for here, but it was a very interesting read none the less. theres a sort of controversy behind it too, would you rather feel pain or nothing? it really reaches out to the reader and begs that question. anyway, good piece keep writing.

I couldn't conjure a tear
For you
Even if I tried

I can't say
I'll miss you
Not even just to lie

I cannot feel hate
For you
I cannot feign love

Locically I deduce
You are not the ONE

Is this what it feels like to not care?

Is this indifference that has come over me better or worse?

- *logically

- the first half is very good, I have to say I like the word ONE being capitalized and making it stand out, this really works well. It is almost like you are writing in a diary and questioning yourself and your thoughts and feelings about this person and the decisions you have made.

No sleepless nights, no tears,
no wounds or scars to bare.
No screaming, no begging,
Its all neither here nor there

But even knowing the end
Of us
Has finally arrived
i have accepted it
No reason to keep fighting.

Is this what it feels like not to care?

I'd rather be broken hearted

- sad ending but everything happens for a reason and this person will be in your life if they are meant to be, but often we deserve someone better and when they come along it makes all the past mistakes worth it.

Great work, keep writing.

How the hell can I follow the previous comments?

I see I had randomly praised one as well, when the hell did I do that?

Ok, I love the whole indecision in this and almost awkward tension.

real depth to this, I love the questions.