Comments : Torched by your touch

  • Let's get this over with.

    Critiques;
    First stanza; second line
    'blushed' should just be 'blush'

    Watch your punctuation throughout.
    Use 'I' instead of 'i'

    Now the content;
    I hope to GOD this isn't true!!
    This is just awful! I know it happens, but it's just so repulsive that I, and I suppose the rest of the world, tends to ignore, to push aside because we don't want to know the truth about such an occurrence.
    I can't offer anything but my condolences and a person to talk to if necessary, but this is truly horrible and I hope that if it is true, then it has at least stopped now. I hope you can possibly find closure from this horrible chapter of your life.

    Take care.

    • 12 years ago

      by jodyann mcintosh

      Ok thanks for comment i really appreciate it, ohh and the "blushed" i thought it was the right word seeing that i was speaking in the past. I will improve on my next poem. Again I thank you