I love the beginning of this piece, but I feel towards the middle it begins to become cluttered (too many words). I don't know how it could be changed and I don't really think it should, but to me it just seems cluttered. I don't know.

Also, I think a little more punctuation is needed in some parts.. a comma here and there.

Other, than that...

FANTASTIC JOB!

Again, the imagery was clear and, surprisingly, it flowed really well.
Your choice and arrangement of words continue to astound me.

Excellent. 5/5

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