Marvelous Amenity

by Jenni & Chelsey   Aug 16, 2012


Arose from the sea, grew amid the foam - a maiden
yet unseen, each of her curves spelled gracefulness.
Admiration swelled in the midst of fellow men, only
two are pure enough to get back to her whispers,

which endue her sides with adorning wings.

Envy creeps like fog upon wicked minds of
young girls full of despair, eyes concealed.
Failing to foresee her majestic wonders,
that could transform a lonesome blackbird

into the purest ivory dove...

Nymphs protect her flower garden, which happens
to be like a second home, while rhodons* and
myrrhinas* are her favorites. Her delightful smile
could elicit the ugliest weed to blossom out

though nature was always sacred to her.

She will release the most intimate pleasure unto your being,
wreathe your face in splendor, providing endless beauty,
drowned affection into the deepest ocean of your soul,
and conceive miracles you never had designed

The elegant Goddess, Aphrodite

*rhodon = red-rose
*myrrhina = myrtle

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  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    When I read the prompt, I immediately thought it would be so hard writing about Aphrodite without exaggerating it, but this is lovely, you both. The title is just perfect up to the very last word - Aphrodite's name itself. I thought it was brilliant, whether it was intended or not.

    I love the black bird - ivory dove image, very memorable. As well as the rhodon and myrrhina references which added an elegant tone to this piece.

    What I'm not sure about is 'gracefullness' the noun is simply 'grace', but if you'd want to retain this, you could drop the other L.?

    I would've alse wanted to see references to the 'shell' where Aphrodite is often depicted as having emerged from? But that's just me lol.

    Lovely piece, great job.

    EDIT: And the title - shouldn't it be "marvellous"?

    • 12 years ago

      by Jenni

      You are right about "gracefulness", thanks for pointing that out.

      As far as I know it's "marvelous" in AE, while it's spelled "marvellous" in BE.

      Thaaaaanks though :) :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    You go girl Jenni. I want to read more

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    WOW.....

    Two great writers, penning a masterpiece...
    the whole poem is flawless, it flows well, has all the little things I like in poetry, flowers, goddesses, its just beautiful poetry

    captivating, charming, interesting, and
    amazing!

    loved it...

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    I know 0.01% about mythologies.....

    a lovely poem... and I'm looking forward to read from you another pieces!

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Thanks guys :)

    Jen I loveeee collabing with you. Are communication is awesome and the way we help one another is what makes our collbs good

    God....can't believe we wrote a mythlogy poem, so glad its over with lol

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