Comments : Bring you loved one

  • 12 years ago

    by Max

    First I love the rhyming in this poem
    it gives a nice ring and goes well with the flow

    "Love is holding its hand under me
    Shielding my true heart for me"

    I like these 2 lines specially the part "true heart"
    made me feel like u had another heart maybe as a camouflage or a first defense line to keep your real heart running and love was your 2nd defense

    U had a few mistakes like in

    "Now I know it is emotions scream for love
    Blessings send for me from the angel above"

    scream-- screaming ( tho I am not sure if u mean to use scream as noun or verb)

    send--sent

    "Angel spread your wide wings and lifts me on my way
    You know where I have be and forever stay"

    lifts--lift

    be---been

    over all this is an interesting piece
    good read =)

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    This is sad and written so elegantly.
    What a beautiful love poem.
    wow Ole
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Odin Ebbesen

    Oh:) a wedding in this poem? a new twist