Unmannerly

by Khalid M Darwish   Aug 20, 2012


Being incondite,
ill-constructed, unpolished
you're lost under feet

* 5/7/5

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  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    I had to look up the word "incondite" lol, and I quite like that word. In the haikus of yours that I've read, you really have this way of finishing off the haikus so well with a captivating line. Good job! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Sparkling snow flake

    Great Job!
    enjoyed the read!
    5.5

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Really good job here, syllable count was spot on and the poem was quite powerfully desribing your word. Well done friend

  • 12 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    I love your short and powerful pieces.

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Incondite can also mean unmannered and unrefined. Someone crude and raw as well. Hence the use of unpolished. In this short piece you described what this word meant. Well done.