You done a really good job in the challenge and used your word great. I had to look it up for its meaning, though. haha.

The only criticism is I think it would read better if you broke it up into stanzas. It would read better in my opinion... however that's just me.

Other than that, I love it.

I agree with Hannah, you did an awesome
job

Great piece my friend worth nominated

OMG! Thats so deep girl. I wish I can dig deep into myself and come up with something as good as this.

Loved how tou started with those happy colorful images, I wondered for a moment why did she post in under sad! Then I got the image; or shall I say the opposites of everything happy in verse one. You penned this one to perfection hon.

A suggestion though, first verse last line, I think it would be better visually if you break that line into two lines :)

Keep up the outstanding writes xxx

"Bouqets of flowers in crystal vases"
^
bouquets

"as the green fields turned thick with mud."
^
turned -- grew ?

"I abundantly clutched to straws
exceeding the energy I had,
my weary heart would not give up."
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abundantly? I'mnot sure it works here. eagerly? furiously?
to -- on to ?
exceeding -- exhausting? depleting? consuming? diminishing?
'left' after had?
A 'but' on the third verse? to separate the disagreeing ideas.
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I thought you did a really good job in the challenge, Saffie. The word you got was quite difficult to use, but you really took advantage of the imagery it presented as well, especially in the last verses. I love that.
The transition from happy to sad images/events was done really well, it was neither fast nor too slow. Each image holds a symbol, I believe, and I especially love the bit about wild horses. I'm not quite sure what it stands for, but it is memorable to me. I thought it was a great image to use for dizziness? nausea? losing consciousness?

Excellent write.