Dust

Heart-breakingly beautiful
TJ

:O

Reading a poem this good stirs something in me...and then to see that the comments on this poem say everything I wanted to...Damn...

I love the style of this...it looks good and when reading it, the heart and mind begin to cross paths and find meaning and understanding.

The emotion in here is subtle yet strong, and that is down to the wording, how you incorporated the essence of the light with sunshine but the dark in shadows, giving it that feel of not being simplistic, complicated emotions but with that beauty of the moon and stars being added as well.

There is a sense of hope with the whole moon thing, how trying to escape by running is a negative image but adding the light to it, gives it a different perspective

You are such an emotive writer but you still manage to make it poetic, instead of being just words and plain emotions

Beautiful, but sad, but amazing

xxxx

I did not know what to expect when I saw that you had posted a new poem.. at first all I could work with was the title and the category. Whenever I hear or read the word "dust" I do not really think about dirt, but rather something old and fading, that maybe settled for a short rest before it disappears in the wind and as depressing as that may be in a way, I also feel as though it's quite fascinating. After all we all know that nothing is eternal, but realizing that some things might gain their freedom with fading is a soothing thought to me.

Anyways, back to the poem: I like the thought of running away with the moon, it feels really sincere and almost hopeless though it could be understood differently too. I mean obviously running away isn't a positive act, but doing it with the moon might be slightly encouraging as the moon has the power to lighten the dark sky and bring us some light during the night.

"Twinkling stars denied
a wish I cast"
^ I think that this is really heartbreaking, it almost feels as though the stars are mocking you by twinkling when rejecting your wish. I mean it's one thing to not reply, but it's another to actually deny something, which emphasizes how much this got to you and how "tough to implement" your wish actually is.

I'm really fond of the fact that you did not only talk about the moon and stars, but the sunshine as well as the shadows, it makes the whole poem seem complete to me and even though it's quite saddening, it really touched me and I enjoyed it. That's why I couldn't help, but to nominate it.

Oh and at first I did not know what to think of the new format, but now that I've read it a few times I actually really adore it. :)

I love it now!!! More than before- and I thank you very much for your helpful ideas!!

Andrea...you have reformated this whole poem and...I do hope you're happy with it? To me it looks so much better..a couple of words have made a HUGE different to it....I hope you like it now????