Play It Well Darling...

Chin up, eyes down, a smile so bright
Baby this is the life you've known
Make the world believe everythings alright
So many secrets the world can't be shown

-* everything's
- such a sad opening stanza which we can all relate to. It makes me wonder what these secretes are for this person because everyone has their own secrets that we do not see.

Another bruise, another story to tell
Another cut, the lies continue to flow
Sweetheart, show them all is well
No one ever has to know it's all just a show

-the brusies implies her secrets are of abuse. which is just more saddening as it is the hardest secret to keep because to end the abuse, you have to end the secrecy too.

Keep it up, it's going to be ok
The act plays on, the crowd belives the tales
Keep your secrets and continue to play
Hide the marks so the story prevails

- *believes
- another truth about abuse victims, they put on a great act to make the rest of the wolrd see what they want to see and not the truth.

Someday you'll start to fall for this act
Soon it'll all fade together an you'll forget
Pretend to smile so that mask doesn't crack
Listen to the tales, an remmeber not to fret

- *remember, and instead of an
- this was a bit of mixed emotions, it was like you wanted to be hopeful but you didnt believe in hope? This is how I took it.

Soon it wont matter an you'll just fade away
The pain will continue but they'll never even know
You'll become what they see each an every day
So baby just keep on acting, don't ruin the show.

- won't, and instead of an.
- I liked the ending but I do not like the wording of the last line, I think it ends too short and doesn't match the flow of the rest of the poem, this is a shame because your poem holds a lot of power and meaning in it and a good flow. I suggest rethinking this line, perhaps something like " don't ruin their perfect show." ?

Well done for this, 5/5.