Comments : Winter Dreams

  • 12 years ago

    by Thomas

    Beautifully written!

    the warmth we receive from a loving person cannot be replaced.
    That is why the longing for them is so strong

  • 12 years ago

    by Max

    This is amazing
    but I still wonder who was singing
    did u mean Fairuz?
    did u mean Fairuz the singer in your poem or somebody else?? I don't know but those wonders makes the poem much better read for me.

    Keep it up =)

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    Haha, ya Max. Fairuz the singer. I love listening to her in the morning :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Max

    Aha makes much sense now lol

    I love her singing too it is something you won't find again =P

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Great poem Meme, I have to say I smiled when you inserted the cup of tea as I have been reading a lot of coffee poems lately and wondered who would bring tea into it lol.

    Lovely work and beautifully penned.

  • 12 years ago

    by One Man Clan

    Meme this is beyond beautiful
    The way you express yourself is unique,

  • 12 years ago

    by One Man Clan

    Meme this is beyond beautiful
    The way you express yourself is unique,

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    This is such a lovely write from you...has that deja vu feel to it that I can't quite explain...you just sit in the morning listening to your music and wishing...

    Me, Fairuz, and a cup
    of tea .. Awaiting for you
    to come across my mind
    so my morning is complete.

    ^^^^

    Like I said...cup of tea...nice music and alone with your thoughts...it was a great opening stanza.

    In between every sip I realize
    that I'm still falling for you. For
    you kept me warm in winters.
    You; my perfect cup of tea.

    I loved the word play here...my perfect cup of tea well..yes it would be warm but your thoughts keep you warmer?

    She sings, and I dream; of all
    the mornings that never came
    to life. She sings, and I ache
    for the sound of your voice.

    ^^^^

    This made me think you are, perhaps, waiting for a phone call but...you become impatient....what is stopping this person from calling...different time zone...work commitments...another reason....this made me wonder...maybe the call isn't even going to come today?

    You became my winter; my
    long nights, but I never tasted
    the chill. I only drank the heat
    of your love, and I was alive.

    ^^^^

    Now you have changed to past tense here like it's over and is now just a memory?

    Here I'm saying goodbye to
    summer mornings; welcoming
    autumn. But yearning for my;
    lost in season, winter dreams

    ^^^

    and this last stanza comfirms this in my mind and yet....you still hope.

    Beautiful...without being over done!

  • 12 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    There isn't much i can say about this piece that hasn't been said, other than the fact i love it, as always your word choice and flow is awesome and the images....oh my the images.....just a wonderful write from an epic poetess xx