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Submitted from my phone and never cared to edit mel.. That's why its a mess hihihi.

Sweets,

I liked the simplicity of this poem. It's simple but that's what makes love beautiful and I think your word choice was a clever way of saying this.

The reference to blowing bubbles was my favourite aspect, such innocence and yet so beauty. Bubbles are such fascinating things, the colours, the playfulness. Everything about them creates such a wonderful feeling so for you to incorporate them I must say I am really happy to read.

"eyes, feeling
Like punching walls"

^Something here wasn't correct. Maybe you could say "and feeling like punching walls" I found myself having to stop when reading because I wasn't sure where to pause and where not to. I'm not really sure and it's probably just me.

"moody,complicated
intense,undeserving."

^I love the descriptions here, however space the words from the commas like I have done above. I'm fussy as you know lol.

Overall this was one of those really sweet poems that any girl or guy wants to hear. We want to be accepted for all of us and it's a wonderful site when someone wants to.

Mel

Damn you people are really writing some beautiful poetry!
This was so just, full of love.

Your word choice felt so dear, and honest and eager. Felt like you are full of those emotions that you just want to show, and this longing that isn't crossing a limit, as in, not melodramatic, nor exaggerating.

Before I dive into the poem, the one thing I did not like which is none of my business, but the 1st letters being ALL uppercase is distracting, really it takes a little bit of the beauty in your structure.

however...god you have this mind Yaki, that comes up with just innocent yet beautiful deep kinky perhaps but definitely unique images...
like in your opening stanza...

I want you happy
Like a child blowing bubbles
In the air unaware of the troubles
around him.

^
how true...I can imagine a little kid playing with bubbles, kidding being all reckless but cute....unaware of the troubles going on, too busy with their own laughter, but not for being selfish, but for being innocent.

2nd stanza, with 2 punctuation marks.. to pause, (please lol), it would still be just as awesome, imagining someone waking up, rolling in bed thinking whether they should get up or toooo lazy to do so, it's such a very cute image.

loved the 3rd emotion/characteristics, in the 3rd stanza. this is indeed a love poem, true love, when you love someone with all that you've got, and in all their diff moods, and diff looks.

Loving them no matter how they are and despite of their actions. This is a very beautiful piece from you, I hope your poetry forgives me.

loved the All of you at the end, that person is lucky ^__^

5/5 < but who cares