Comments : Token For You

  • 12 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Your amazing, i love this so much sister xx

  • 12 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Wow I LOVE your pieces, this one is no exception. I feel the sincerity in it. I do feel it's written for a friend of yours that is going through hard time, and you telling him/her that you'll always be there, no matter what.. I maybe wrong but thats how I felt:)

    Perfectly written.

  • 12 years ago

    by Thomas

    This would a great token to show your love/appreciation for someone.

    Great job Maple ;)

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Sometimes its hard to open up even to a close friend, there are things that just remain with us, or torment us since there is that insecurity that won't let us share with anyone. it's really sweet of you to have written this for a friend.

    since the whole thought of being there for your friend no matter if you don't know what makes him/her sad is what counts. Also that you want to ease his/her agony shows how good of a friend you are. I'm pretty sure that with this poem this person will feel better.

  • 12 years ago

    by Sunshine

    This came across my attention in the right time. I actually understood this poem, like no other by you.
    My friend got angry at me from a short while, like 2 hours lol, because we are so close that I don't open up regarding certain things.

    It's easier to open up for people who are not close, like it is also very easy to talk freely for someone who you have just met on taking it all out infront of someone who is close. At times, it's the opppposite, but for ME, I am like this friend of yours!

    The bond between you is something so beautiful! I love how you show that you are with that friend through good and bad, throuh bitter and sweet and you imply it by sayingg:

    nightmares vs dreams
    sunsets and dawns.

    also it implies time...like past and future moments. showing indeeeeed an VISUAL artifacts of your love !!

    the poem is very strong, and flowing and heartfelt. I love the meaning behind it, something I can relate to.

    you are an amazing friend, who is loved by many. just like me he he :P (A)

    5/5 keep writing !

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Before I read the beautiful comments above me, I though that this was really about a bird.. maybe caged... or wounded... and I truly was fond of the idea; I so much liked how this ended.

    But if the meaning is about friendship, then it's still okay with me :P ... such a lovely write!

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    I really I'm quite stuck for words here but...as usual..I'll try..

    I'm writing this display
    of visual artifacts
    as a token of my
    love for you.

    I walk with you,
    between sunsets
    and a new dawns
    grace.

    ^^^

    Sleep is disturbed but...you don't mind?

    Between your
    nightmares and dreams,
    this is what I feel,
    I am with you,
    maybe that's why
    your afraid to tell me? * you're*

    Afraid to tell you what? Something you don't want to know but...really you do?

    It's ok free bird,
    I know, and
    I'm honored to
    be the whisper
    that soothes
    your agony,

    ^^^

    To me this is the most important part of the poem...there are unspoken words that neither of you can say yet... you both acknowledge them..

    I'll never stop, even after death
    I'll be there for you always. 'll try...*I'll*

    Hate correcting such a personal piece but I know you wouldn't like it if I didn't?

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Very touching piece Maple, it is a bit of a mixture between all the categorys really. Sad, happy, love, inspiring.

    This bond described is so rare and special, one which is desired by a lot fo people in many relationships. nicely written. xx

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Andrea, I have no idea why I never saw this, I must have my eyes shut all the time, seems I am missing some great poetry...

    Anyway, You always touch me with your writes, to the point that I find myself lost in a world, I can always feel the emotion and here I feel the love and the pain to do what's right.

    Sometimes those close to us, bare the brunt of our bad moods, our anger and we are so open and gentle to those we maybe aren't as close to...it is something that happens to all of us.

    I love your words, always...like I said, touching piece.

    x