Comments : Seeds Of A Rose

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Amazing! I am in love with this poem. It is so deep and reflects someting for me which you might not have intended it to, but for abuse survivors this poem will touch deep and speak out to them very strongly.

    Your opening verse

    Court up in the chaos
    Where the wind get in
    Giving you a chill
    No happiness just a momentary thrill

    - wind get in, should be wind gets in.

    Nothing is hidden
    Innocents goes up in smoke

    - innocents, i think you mean innocence?

    The imagery of the rose blooming or producing a seed but it being less beauitful than most is quite heart breaking, it reminds me of the story The uGly Duckling.

    Thanks for sharing this.

  • 12 years ago

    by Amreen

    Seriously I must say you are an intelligent writer and have written a thoughtful poem again.. I loved the usage of words... they are apt for this poem and you have penned the emotion very well:)

    Brilliant(: