Ruby Sighs

You brought to light your true and deep emotions in this piece. It speaks of how personal these feelings are and they are entierly your own. That's what makes this poem. I could sense the raw sadness and it was cold, almost edgy. Nobody could describe it better than this. Fantastic although a very sad write. Well done.

Danika.

I love this piece. It flows so well as though you were writing this whilst being captivated by a lighted candle in front of you; it's vivid and abstract at the same time, and you mesmerize the reader with every line. It's powerful and each word seemed chosen carefully as they complimented each other. The cadence of this piece is outstanding that the first time I've read this in the club, I just had to read it out loud - it is that beautiful, and I find myself reading it again today before I decided to comment. It's quite rare that I find a poem here that's written as beuatifully as this one. I believe this piece has something special. Very well done. I truly enjoyed this poem. Keep writing,

Love this, great depth to this, nice flow filled with awesome imagery and the shape is fantastic. Who would have thought about linking candles and a ruby?

Slander scalds
a ritualistic
candle,
transforming
her scandalous
misfortunes,
into a fire ball
of light.
________
I Need to understand exactly what you were feeling that enabled you to write such lines
that are not only packed with grief and sorrow, but carry with them a glimpse of hope that is resembled by the fireball of light,

I truly like the message here, or what I understood from it, No matter how much grief you go through and hardships you expeince
there's always a way out for a better life
and while I believe that this piece was written in a moment of anguish, I can spot the creativity from a mile away, this is too deep for the normal mind to fathom, and I truly love it
5/5 never the less

I think that in the first verse A midst* should be Amidst.
The s-sound seems to dominate throughout your poem though it is the most evident in your first stanza. I was a bit surprised that the sigh was summoned because that is an action, which we chose to do though sighs usually happen out of upset-moments.

You are creative, you really are. Your second stanza is so much deeper than I could have ever put it. I guess this candle seems to purify the person, which you described very beautifully.

The ending was really powerful because I felt as though I could picture it happening, you did not let your poem end abruptly, but rather slowly, just like a candle's light doesn't cease to exist within one moment, but it takes time until it completely passed.