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by Darren
Nice short and sweet poem with great imagery and a lovely message. The rhyming was good apart from the last stanza where it was a little off would it be worth putting an extra line in to rhyme with heart to help the flow? Only my opinion do with it what you like. Although the last line needs to stay it is a great ending to this.
by Nigel S
Thanks Darren for your comments,I will seriously think about your suggestions and may rewrite at a later date. I do appreciate the fact that you have taken the time to read a couple of my poems and review them for me. Kind Regards Nigel S