Dock

I thought I found you,
a dock to unload my soulboat

^^ These lines are what I'm thinking were enough of a hook. They really caught my attention. And I love the use of soulboat and the metaphor that holds.

Somewhere to unload
the precious load I carry

^^ So simple yet so important for the rest of the piece.

This load is my message
the message of my soul

^^ My favorite line it "the message of my soul" and hopefully whoever really gets it deserves it :)

I must tell you
that it's only meant for you

^^ I love how it is directed to one person yet any can read it directed to them and gain a different perspective.

My soulmessage is
my sole message to you

^^ The repetition of the soulmessage is used well. It really sticks to the directness and theme of the piece.

But you denied me access
claimed that I had the wrong papers

^^ Now the wonderful piece takes a sad tole. Why? Well, I guess that's life and this was and excellent way to turn the focused emotion of such a piece.

So my soulmessage is still stuck
between my heart and soul

^^ At least it is still safe. Loved these lines, they kinda made me stop and think a bit.

And during a cold starry night
you threw your own Tea Party

^^ Wonderful ending, still on the sad tole and again wonderfully used.

All in all, I love your word choice and the flow. I love the simplicity yet pure emotional expression. Fantastic job. Magnificent piece.

Congrats on it being your 100th!

~MRK

Great piece T
5/5

Congratsss on your 100th poem Thomas! Been amazing to read your pieces. I love the passion you have behind thise words you write!

Ok now back to this piece! The sad tone ib this poem was very heartfelt, and use of wording was spot on!

"My soulmessage is
my sole message to you"
^^
This line especially had a lot of depth in it, love th play of word meanings here, same sound different meanings.

And you ended it just perfectly.

Keep it up T, waiting for your 200th poems :)