Dreams of my paradise

So far this is the one I like the most from you.

Typo in this sentence or part...

"Were together" it should be "we are together" or we're together.

This piece sounds like a paradise and your words made a serene and peaceful scene in my mind. I also like that this piece brought me back to Adam and eve for some reason. I think it might have been due to the mention of animals surrounding you and your family.

Good piece. Keep it up.

My fav lines:In a world where no one judges,

Were together,

Other people, other animals surround us

As we lie here in this bliss,

A garden created from a wish

The way the world could be

You and me,

The way things should be.

This creates a scene of peacefulness. Of nothing but happiness, surrounded by the people you love. I think that is everyone's little piece of paradise. :)

I like the simplistic tone to your writing, a nice pen. :)

Simple and sweet, I really enjoyed this piece :) 5/5

I like your style and visiting the romantic images of your paradise

I enjoyed reading this and hope yours dream comes true soon( at least a while)