Wow! Timothy, what can one say about this piece of fine art? Im in love with almost an old english tone, yet no old english wording used. Not a fan of rhyming, however in this piece I feel it helped your poem and I totally enjoyed. LOVED the use of "swallow" in this ! Serious creativity. Well done my friend!

I totally love this, too!

You are gifted when it comes To poetry that rhymes.
this is a creative piece you've written

5/5

Oh my. Such gorgeous imagery this poem has created in my mind. The rhymes worked perfectly and they were neither forced nor distracting - something I find so hard to do.