by Nema
I like the ending of this piece :) However, allow me to give my feedback on some things.. |
by Samuel Ernst
Thanks for the feedback. I normally dont pay alot of attention to grammer and proper wording when I write like this. Its all a thought just poured out onto paper, or in this case a computer screen, honestly I just did spell check and called it good. Dont say your sorry, the scrutiny was good, makes me notice that I have along way to go has a writer. I do hope the message was clear. |
I actually liked the form you have here. I don't think it's necessarily considered prose or anything, but it has a few poetic devices in it. I really loved reading and the message is indeed clear. I too stumbled over a few things, but I knew what you meant. After reading it makes me wonder if this was close to home for you, seems as it may be? Interesting piece, worth the read. |