Family portrait (part 3)

What a brilliant ending! That second stanza, finishing "love Mummy" is gut wrenching! At least there is some peace at the end. More brilliantly varied writing, Tony, and the best trilogy of poems I've read on this site. Would nominate if I could. Truly enjoyed these and will come back to them. straight 5 from me.

This is so wonderful. It brought tears to my eyes. The punctuation throughout this is kinda funky, but other than that, the wording, the emotion - it's literally beyond words for me.

Exceptionally written, my darling.

Transparent drops of memories
radically fall from her eyes,
on the back of the portrait,
was her mothers hand writing-

remove the comma after portrait.
- this opening was interesting because you give the reader the tone of the poem being sad because there are tears for some unknown reason and then you give a mystery object of the portrait - so straight away the readers curiosity has to then read on.

I can't bare the pain of her loss, I will
love you forever but I never want you
to forget your sister love mummy.

bare = bear. I think you should also put the speech in brackets here so we know this is the words of the mother. Also put a comma after sister, or put a full stop and have love mummy on its own. Either would work.

As she reads the date she realises
her mother wrote this fifty years ago;
her eyes gazed to the mirror
as she see's , her reflection.

- remove the apostrophe from sees, then also take away the comma after it because I is not needed. The tense here also changes so I would be aware of that, it is very hard sometimes. But you say "reads" "realises" so it is being told in the present tense, but then you say " her eyes gazed to the mirror as she sees" so gazed should be gaze, to keep it to the present tense to match the rest of the stanza.

She see's a young girl,faintly in her reflection
and for the first time she feels freedom,
she has know reason to remain ,as her golden
wings open a smile shines the way to happiness.

- again remove the apostrophe from sees, I don't believe you need the comma before faintly either because you are continuing the sentence. "know" should be no.

Finally there all reunited ,
outside heavens pearly gates.

- there should be they're - they are.

Sad and touching poem about grief and loss and the need to be reunited with the important people who you love and do not want to live without. A few errors to be fixed, but then it will be a great poem which I am sure will touch many readers.

Sad sad piece :( I found just a few grammatical errors in here love, know should be no, and a comma needs to break up a few sentences in the beginning.

But the story, my my.. Havent lost my mother, but when I read some of the old cards my Grandma gave me, seeing her handwriting makes me teary eyed...Kinda inspires me to write a poem about it actually.

I love the ending though, you bring hope when describing the reunion of these two in heaven. That just puts a smile on anyones face. Changes the tone of this piece as well.

Well done!

Oh, Tony... this touches me so much. Losing my mother, I know how hard it would be to read something that was written to me over fifty years ago, seeing it for the first time. The feeling of freedom, the feeling of peace... so touching. They are reunited for eternity. <3

Another inspirational piece from you!