Homesick

by PinkyPrincess   Sep 5, 2012


I stare into the dark sky;
never had it looked so eerie.
Even the moon is on vacation,
and the stars remain concealed.

I shiver in the chilly weather; my body is ice.
My surroundings are as plain as a white cloud.
I'd rather keep to myself in this place while
I hide myself from the tenebrous shadows.

I dig up the dried pen from my pocket,
and scribble the only word I can think of:
h o m e ...
it is the only place I wish I could be.

The faces of my family still flash in my mind,
I wonder if they are safe and sound;
yet there is no way to know for certain,
as we all were forced to flee separately.

My tongue starts to dry and I realize
how parched I am - and how I didn't
savor my last sip of mineral water;
I'm left to swallow my own saliva.

Images of my mother braiding my hair,
the nights my father read to me in bed,
all the times I fought with my sister over a toy...
I would give anything - to feel that once again.

Reminiscing all of my treasured memories
was as painful as slitting my two wrists.
Missing my previous life was too strenuous,
so I shoved the last drop of positivity into a bottle.

If only we could reunite under the same moon but
that is a foolish wish, for my existence is evanescent.
I wondered if I ever found my way home,
could I even still refer to it as 'home' ?

~ written for a contest related to the Hunger Games, and the topic was nostalgia.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Sarah.. I'm so sorry :P

    hehe.. I didn't know you posted this. I thought you want.

    Okay.. seriously, I was talking to a judge when the contest finished, and I said... I never knew Sarah has such skills... I don't mean anything bad... but I thought that your writes are only for princesses, meaning romantic and stuff...

    but in the contest, YOU HIT ME LIKE A BOMB...... I LIKED SO MUCH the 4 poems that you wrote. And this piece.... is AWESOME.

    • 12 years ago

      by PinkyPrincess

      Thanks so much Abed!!! And lol I don't think I have a poem about princesses but I know what you mean ;P

  • 12 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    My judging comment:
    Loneliness and despair seeps out of this work like pus from a painful wound. "Even the moon is on vacation" leaving the speaker not-home alone. The use of "tenebrous shadows" stopped me cold, since I had to look it up; although it fits, I doubt if the vast majority of readers would know it. The nostalgia factor is in abundance, with that twinge of hopelessness that goes with it: thinking of her "treasured memories ... was as painful as slitting my two wrists." I had a little trouble with "my existence is evanescent" simply because I have always felt that word to be lighthearted. Overall the poem fully meets the criteria.

  • 12 years ago

    by Wild flower

    I dunno what to say, the words you poured in this piece, are so heartfelt

    I dig up the dried pen from my pocket,
    and scribble the only word I can think of:
    h o m e ...
    it is the only place I wish I could be.
    ^^^^
    I love love love love this, I felt how the hard it is just thinking of your home, and family.

    The last stanza left me speechless, I felt that you gave up, you know that you cant even wish for returning. Great job..

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    The way you told the story is outstanding! And the metaphors were just spot on. You write with a lot of spemotion and passion, and you just take the reader in a journey with you through all the things you went through.

    Perfect hon :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Aaron

    Honestly, before I finished reading I started this comment due to that opening stanza...LOVED IT!

    I must say it was a great poem. A good length and a brilliant flow. Oh, but that imagery was what I enjoyed most about this poem. I had that feeling of being in the "action". Impressive poem

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