Let not the Start, overwhelm you. Where pleasure is vast, doom is known.

Mercy this blew me away-

I felt like I was lying on my back, watching the clouds float by. Within the clouds you can see shapes and thats the angle I took within this breathtaking poem.. It had an elegant tone of romance .... I adore love poems that sing from the heart and are mixed with peaceful nature tones... this is beautiful ~

Oh my gosh I was so confused, Ben just wrote a poem with a similar title, I thought this was a sequel, then I saw it was by you, and I was shocked. For someone who just started writing non rhyming poetry, this is incredible. I mean honestly, you should forget ever writing rhyming poetry because this is for you.

When you can write a poem that really moves a reader, and leaves them feeling just like you, which I felt totally hopeless and heart broken while reading this, you know your a dang good poet.

I'm proud to have your talent amongst our group now. Great use of imagery here, I had amazing pictures in my head. This was beautiful! :)

Tonight you appeared at my bedside
as if you were attempting to taunt me.

i love that part!!!! lol and i think it could be a tad better but then again EVERYONE can be better even while they are the best lol and i like it but i don't love it sorry i love the imagery but i couldn't sence any emotions bias of me but still i couldn't either way 4/5

Although the nature imagery in the opening is well used, I am most impressed by your broad vocabulary and the metaphoric depth it conveys. The wistful reminiscence leads on a meandering journey that, with hindsight, is captured with the dreamy haze which accompanies any fantasy.

I got carried away with this as if I am reading some story, soooo beautiful... The imageries kept the pace alive throughout... You are sooo talented my friend... I didnt even realised that It didnt rhymed... It didnt actually bother me.... Cuz the flow was just amazing...:)

beautiful my friend:))

Haha, I was so disappointed when this poem ended... part 2????

Really moving piece which just flows perfectly and is flawless in my eyes. It is very well written and I can tell this is from the heart, very talented, well done.

This is a love poem that leaves me sad.
yeah, it had a nice effect because it started with the girl appearing at the bedside then it ended with an embraced that woke up the guy. It must have been a daydream that turned into a really sad way of waking up.

and I thought that this was really a good, it takes talent to do that. To take the reader into one thought then to give it a twist. It's something risky yet if done accordingly it's works well. I feel that that is what you did with this piece.

This piece really... and I mean REALLY, touched me. Recently my father told me he had a dream... of my mother laying in bed with him (She passed away) ... and that when he woke up, he thought she was still there...he reached for her, and she wasn't. It has literally broke my heart. ... and this poem just brought me back to him telling me that, seeing the look on his face...the heartache.

I will be adding this to my favorites, I can't stop reading it. You, sir, have quite a talent that truly captures the reader and makes them feel every single emotion.

This is really good....I like it:)