Unconditional love

My brightest day was filled with rain
My deepest fear was to feel pain

I like this part the most because it must have been something really terrible that caused a person to feel sad even on the happiest day. Also, everyone is scared of hurting and this fear prevents most of them from loving again. You really had written about these feelings very well in your work. Nice poem!

I very good love story in this piece
i wanted to read more as i read along, it is filled with such emotion.

It flowed quite nicley and progessed well at the same time.

"He demanded a chance
Did not cared about the flames
I knew something was different
And began to admired his persistence"

Was my fav stanza, for him not caring

Overall a good poem which tells a good story.. you're very lucky =)

5/5 from me

It is a beautiful piece... The feel of person who transformed on getting a touch of true love is brought out well... :)
What khalid pointed out is correct, you could edit it and your piece would be flawless...
Good work:)

It is a beautiful piece... The feel of person who transformed on getting a touch of true love is brought out well... :)
What khalid pointed out is correct, you could edit it and your piece would be flawless...
Good work:)

Nice piece of you, full of emotion. However, I have some critiques:

But then I met him
I cared enough to warned him
Insisted that he stay away
Informed him that he might get burn

This stanza has misgrammar and should read as follows:

Until then I met him
I cared enough to warn him
Insisted that he stays away
Informed him that he might get burned

He demanded a chance
Did not cared about the flames
I knew something was different
And began to admired his persistence

This stanza also shouls read:

He demanded a chance
Did not care about the flames
I knew something was different
And began to admire his persistence

This aside, the poem is valuable and interesting.