Freedom (Tanaga)

You're welcome my dear Khalid keep writing poetry i will add you as my favorite author so i can read every poem you come up with you have great talent a talent that i will never be able to achieve but i don't mind! :)

Queen Ash

Oh wow this is just beautiful! i LOVE the last line this poem is short but very beautiful and filled with emotions too so congrats! :) i love the poem and it's true freedom is not easy to attain 5/5

Queen Ash

Hmm.. everything made sense.. expect this part

"I've wounds got depth in my heart "

--there is something odd and not making sense the way it's written

I think it's either

Some wounds got depth in my heart....

or I've got wounds deep in my heart...

or I've wounds with depth in my heart... but still this third one I'm not sure, may be the above one makes more sense.

other than that, I got the idea that freedom is near.. it has a door and I'm guessing you mention Red FReedom because of the blood that was stained in the hand.. So perhaps, you fought till you are almost there to open the door and find freedom? just fighting to cross that door.. hmm...

well done

My red freedom, you've a door

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I love this opening - the symbols are superb.

Knocked on by each blood stained hand

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The imagery here is just perfect - adds a real darkness to the piece, but also a story, a depth that readers wouldn't assume from such a short piece.

In me, of what nights threw you,
I've wounds got depth in my heart

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May I suggest that the last line read like:
'I've got wounds deep in my heart'
OR
'My wounds got depth in my heart'
It doesn't quite make sense the way you have written it.

I have never seen this form/style before, and I really like it. So thanks for the introduction, a beautifully written one if I do say so myself. (:

OVERALL;
You have managed to write a story with great depth in this piece and with vivid imagery. 5/5

Really great poem khalid i knew little bit about syria