May dreams become true

So many people will be able relate to this poem. Personally I did not get the "cuteness" that has been mentioned. Instead I read a harsh truth that once is known and at some level understood looses a little of its pain. I think you are a very talented I indervidual and I look fowards to reading more of your work.

The title.
I love the title! It sends a message of hope all by itself and I love that optimistic-ness. (:

The rhyme.
This piece rhymed absolutely flawlessly. I particularly loved the use of such unique rhymes - these ones you have chosen are quite originally used.

Pace/flow.
Again, both are faultless Khalid.

Word Choice/ Arrangement.
I like your word choice, as I said with the rhymes, some of these are really cleverly chosen and arranged to make a really clever piece.

Overall.
The upbeat piece was incredibly enjoyable to read and the positive emotions are so rare to read lately that it makes things all the more better (:

Five/Five

This is so cute! I picture a man who is trying so hard to find the courage to tell a girl he likes her, but just can't figure out how! I like the rhymes, and your word choice is a big simple in some areas, but it works here. I think this is a very good piece! :)

5/5

`Briana

Hehe.. sleepless nights when one is in love, and wishing that dreams may come true.

I sensed something different in this poem..

Were you trying to rap?

anywho, I thought that this was ohhh, was this poem of someone trying to proposed or invite someone to a date?

that's what this poem sounded to me, it's well written.

A very cute poem... I mean teens feel the same way when in.love or when we fall in love for the first time, we experience the same and wish that it become true...
I hence liked it a lot as I related to it a lot... those sleepless nights..!!!
And words used were good as they depicted the poem well!!

Good as always;)