Years have passed, yet memories remain same
My heart still pounds on hearing your name
Unsaid story of yours and mine
Hidden story of love that couldn't shine

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I think you should say "the same"instead of "same"in the first line

When I read this stanza, I get a strong feeling this is about you and someone older, someone married or something like that...

Really sad how you said that the love could not shine.

My first sight, you dressed in black and red
Those innocent eyes and smile perfectly made
Our very first handshake and nervous greetings
And those shy glance on accidental meetings

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Now I am convinced this is a young person, because of the innocent eyes and shy glances...I cold picture this, two shy youngsters falling in love.

Sensible man, as always you were
You made me realize things I was never aware
Precious most, amongst so many
Adorable, you were my destiny

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You describe how love changes you, and makes you feel like a true woman. Loved the wording in this part.

Forbidden was our love, for people to offend
Wise would be for us, to make an end
And here I am, to move on my own
My treasure, my destiny, you're forever gone

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Sad and melancholic, in the wording you can see how much he must have meant to you.

But we managed, and stood really strong
We still smile and have learned to move along
I know, with time, every wound will heal
But you won't be replaced for the way I feel.

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I hope you do move on, dear girl. Life is too precious to keep dwelling on the past.

Really well done!!!

5/5 Ingrid

My most fav. durin d contest..loved it..
U shud write more, u hv al d elements of a gud poet..

There are strong feelings.I liked your poem!It is nice:)

LM... what an intense poem dear... I loved every bit of it... the end was emotiinal :(
It brought tears to me... very powerful write....:)

There was a tinge of sadness when I read the title. It sort of hinted regret.
My only suggestions would be, as Ingrid stated, the "the same" and I think you could change glance to glances. Otherwise.this was well-written.

Awh this poem has my heart completly!!! i mean i've had this COUNTLESS time so i know the pain in this poem it's a bittersweet pain tho...5/5

Queen Ash!!!!

It's all amazing!

As I like this in particular too..

"Our very first handshake and nervous greetings
And those shy glance on accidental meetings"

Keep it up..

5/5

You are a perfect poet. You are really brave. Keep writing. You are exceptional and outstanding.

While reading this i was just thinking-> this is the story of my life :(
so sad and yet bful.. I couldnt stop myself frm crying after reading this :'( it touched my heart.
this is a masterpiece, i believe