One Day (Collab)

by Meme & Naughtymouse   Sep 9, 2012


One day, yes one day
I'll read the poetry in
your eyes. Wait for me ..

Ink will stain my soul
as words will fall on parchment,
for just you to read.

**Double Senryu**

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By: Meme
And: Naughtymouse
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  • 12 years ago

    by Boy

    Such an amazing writing. love it

  • 12 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Thanks guys :-) and meme, its been a while but i still love collabing with you xxx

    • 12 years ago

      by Meme

      I know! It feels like forever!
      Hehe, and I still love collabing with you as well :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    Great collab, I love the repition in the first line, puts real emphasis on the fact you feel that you are not quite there yet.

    'wait for me' I love this line, almost pleading.

    the whole thing works really well.

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Great job you two, keep it up xx

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Excellent partnership on such a magnificent piece. I absolutely love the flow between each part and how coherent it all is. It's almost hard to believe that two authors worked on this, because it is just so well done. The word choice was wonderful and the style amazing. Fantastic job on creating one strong voice in this piece as well as mastering how to make it seem as though there was only one author.

    Wonderful!

    • 12 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks a lot!

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