by Baby Rainbow Sep 9, 2012
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Warm rays of sunshine |
by Jenni
I think that this is a well written Senryu and although it's short you manage to create a nice atmosphere, which represents the sunbathing quite well. I also like how you described it to be positive even though you refer to your skin as pale.. since it might be a pain to some as they'd mostlikely get a sunburn instead of a tan. Well done. |
by Lyndy
Peaceful and relaxing..nice:) |