I like this piece - I haven't read many poems about nature in a while, and when I do it's always a breath of fresh air.

Critiques:
Your description was detailed, spot on and beautiful.

BUT....

ok, I will be blunt here, but I honestly don't intend to be mean - I just want to see it turn out as great as your other poems!

I think this piece is lacking something. It seems boring because perhaps it's so predictable. It's not the writing - that's great as usual, it's the content.

I think perhaps make the piece a double or triple haiku just to give it more depth, because as it is it seems kind of superficial and too predictable... ??

It just lacks your usual 'BAM! Amazingness'

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That wasn't too cruel was it.... SORRY if it was. You're easily one of my favourite writers on here and I KNOW you can do better. (:

Don't get me wrong, I do like it as it is (SO DON'T DELETE IT) - but as I said, it lacks that amazingness that you seem to be able to write.