Brumous Nightfall

by Jenni   Sep 10, 2012


In late autumn the pitchy part of Paris
is a callous city, scorning nature,
dominated by ashen colors. Bright
billboards are tagged to facades
blackened by exhaust fumes,
setting a dingy differentiation,
which only intensifies the desolation.

That pitchy part of Paris isn't worthy
of carrying Mona Lisa's smile, yet
you absolutely are though your smile
surpasses any artistry almost certainly.

I light my cigarette while you tumble
through dreary streets, doubtlessly
a proud woman before life got you weary.
Whispering words as you stop and turn
my way; I fell for your eyes while yours
had yet to see me. Promenading among
moonbeams with you until we reach
the middle of the bridge.

Holding you, your heart hanging on lips,
that breathe new life into me when kissed.
When your lips trembled I couldn't help,
but to silence you with my halothane*
oozing gloves. Don't pule. Holding you
as your body grows numb.

One last daunting kiss before I hoist and
drop you; falling into the dark water.

Darling, tonight you'll sleep for good.

*halothane = sedative.

~ Written for Abeds site contest (The Hunger Games), my first and last dark poem lmao.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow Jenni, this is so descriptive and creative. I firstly want to thank you for explaining what the word halothane means, lol. I found it so interesting to read this poem and enjoyed the different language use. I hope it won't be your last as I think you done a great job in this topic and would like to read more from you on it.

    Well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    The vivid descriptions in this poem is awesome and helps bring out the darkness of the poem. It is enjoyable to read and I am in awe of your write here! Simply awesome. I agree, do not stop writing dark poems. You may have stumbled across something here :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I love Jenni being dark. :D
    I'm not going to break it apart and all that, it's too perfect in my opinion for that.
    I just wanted to say LOVEEE it...and it's nominated by me. <3

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Jenni!

    I really knew that this one was your poem :P
    it has your style all over it, I can't say much into the meaning of the poem because my eyes get all twisted with words and my brain can't process all. yup, I need a dictionary to fully grasp the image. However, I like the tone!! I like the hmm what to call it, the confidence that I find in this piece as well as the dark scene.

    I mean okay okay, I will say what I pictured when I read it, even if it's wrong. I saw a woman who seduced this guy and then he got sedated and to sleep, he went into the water. SEE! you gave it mystery unlike the way I say it. You are awesome and I meant it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Holy metaphors! In looveeee with this piece Jenni. I loved it the moment I read it and couldnt wait for you to post this so I could comment!!

    That pitchy part of Paris isn't worthy
    of carrying Mona Lisa's smile, yet
    you absolutely are

    ^ I found this to be such a freaking cute yet creative way to word someones smile, which usually in poetry is so simply stated as just "beautiful", you gave this smile life, as artists try to do in paintings.

    I fell for your eyes while yours
    had yet to see me

    ^ o0o0o0!! Jen that was so deep, that one line right there had me wrapped around this poem, excellent words here.

    One last daunting kiss before I hoist and
    drop you; falling into the dark water.

    Darling, tonight you'll sleep for good.

    ^^ omg what an ending!! Leaving us at the climax, that is somewhat creepy, dark, spooky, all of the above lol.

    Such an amazing talent you have, I never want to see it go to waste. Just beautiful!

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