MARYANNE QUIT BEING A POETIC GENIUS.

Sheesh. This is freaking gorgeous. So short put packed with seriously so much imagery, I can't believe it. And what an awesome topic. I swear the crisp mornings truly make me want to become a runner, just so I can drink it all in. Beautiful beautiful beautiful!

MaryAnne,

I absolutely loved this. I am so fascinated by short poems lately and this was one that took my breath away. You're simply speaking of going for a jog and yet I you find beauty in everything around you. You're observing and presenting a lovely scene for the reader to enjoy too.

Breathe cities and buildings = I love this description and I can totally relate. I am often breathing in buildings, I have such a love for architecture and so they're something I'm always paying attention to. That and how they combine with nature as you stated here by referring to trees and the breeze.

Wonderful little read
Mel

The title being so demanding and eye-catching I found myself reading your poem. At first I thought you meant the message you would be trying to convey that you'd want the reader to listen to, but I think you rather meant for us to listen to you in a way as in understand the experience you've made andmaybe be more open for similar experiences ourself. I generally think that we need to sense our surroundings way more than we do and appreciate it while we are at it.

"Autumn has taken my lungs"
^ I am so glad that you picked the word "autumn" instead of "fall", it sounds much more beautiful and has more of an atmosphere to it. I know this is going to sound exaggerated, but I think you can almost smell that word, while "fall" does not really do much, at least when it comes to me.
Anyways, I liked this introductory stanza because I felt the same as the persona. Not only my lungs being embraced, but also filled with every bit that autumn has to offer.

"and my ears are trees sailing
on a breeze....."
^ This is so beautiful and I can assure you that I would have never managed to come up with that, but am grateful for at least stumbling upon someone being so creative. :)

Very fascinating and interesting poem, though I honestly prefer the first half more than the second. :)