Daaang, you are killin it! I will write a better comment when I'm at a computer, am on my phone now and itll take ages :)

I particularly love the first line. It was strong and a great opening. I actually found it more delicate than harsh, you used words such as love, tonight and breath (all visually appealing) but it was a sad line. The use of the body throughout the poem was something that caught my interest, it's a prominent feature in my work and you used it beautifully.

I'm always fond when someone uses the word poetry, in poetry. The way you described the type of poetry "alternatively soft poetry" was lovely.

I counted 12 syllables in each line, great job!

"When did those crisp curses become my protector?"

^I like this line but something doesn't sound right to me. I feel as though it should "When did those crisp curses become my protectors" or "When did that crisp curse become my protector".

Enjoyable read!
Mel