Saffie....this is an epic write :-) an absolute pleasure to collab with you :-))) x

Saffie Daffie I loooveddd that you opened up in this piece and wrote what you struggled with... Ben is such a wonderful collab partner isn't he? Kind of makes it easier to write when you have someone elses words to bounce off of as well.

Lovedddd
"ears of the future"
and
"clogged lungs"

Interesting lines!

What I love most is the ending two lines. Leaving off on a positive note, thats always good to read after a poem that is written with clear frustration.

Well done you two :)

I really enjoyed this collab! It felt like there was only one author, yet the voices varied and kinda wove some interesting patterns around each other, to a point that it added an entire new element to such a type of writing. The style was fantastic. The word choice was interesting, oh no, not a bad interesting an amazing interesting. An interesting with power that made this piece even more phenomenal than it already was.

I think the way you addressed the piece to your words and thoughts (not literally, but thats how it felt to me) was an excellent idea. This piece has stood out to me in more ways than one, and is now on its way to my favorite poems list.

Magnificent write, I really really enjoyed it.

5/5 of course.

~MRK