Into the Darkness of the Abyss

by Lost Soul   Sep 17, 2012


Into the darkness of the abyss
and all this pain that does persist,
the days, the years, the weeks, the months,
the shattered dreams now turned to dust.

I've hoped and prayed for better days,
searched for sunlight in pouring rains.
But alas this life in which I live has left
a shadow oh so grim.

I hate not living while I'm alive,
no longer knowing who's trapped inside.
This beaten body that is mine, my own reflection
from which I hide.

I once had hope of joy and love,
to many failures have left me numb.
I see no future just past mistakes, as much
as any soul can take.

So I bid farewell and adieu to all,
I make my final beckon call.
To live in dreams that won't subsist,
away from fear and haplessness.

I fall into the darkness of the abyss.

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  • 12 years ago

    by La Reina De Corazones

    I really love this poem it's nice and dark and you can really feel it unlike other poems that i have read overall it's great and i enjoyed reading it lol 5/5 from me

  • 12 years ago

    by Jump from Life

    I... No criticisms. It's magnificent. Amazing rhythm and tone and... You brought tears to my eyes because this is my soul explained. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Axelle

    Wow. This poem reminded me of one of Edgar A. Poe's poems, that had a fast tempo to it. I can't help but read it quickly for some reason...that doesn't mean that I don't understand it, I just can't read it slowly. There are very few poems that are like that for me :)

    I love this. I really do. However, one thing is bothering me - you didn't put commas after 'the days the years the weeks' which is what is usually done for a list. I was also wondering if 'haplessness' is meant to be 'helplessness.' I know hapless is a real word, but I just wanted to bring to your attention just in case.

    This poem isn't just sad - it has a dark edge to it too, and I love dark poems. This comes close to being a perfect one for me :) so congratulations. You have hit my favorite mark so far ^.^

    If this is based on a true feelings, I am sorry. I really hope it isn't, and I have a feeling that it isn't, but I can never tell for certain with poems. Always gets me somewhere.

    Welcome to the site! I hope you have fun here :) I am honored for being your first commenter on your first poem. Keep on writing!

    Excellent
    5/5

    ~S

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