Comments : Missing A Piece...

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I love what you are trying to say here.....Which is really sad...losing friendships are hard, watching them slip away is hard..Ive been there many times...

    Id suggest you change your opening sentence to Piecing together, rather than piecing up..makes a little more sense.

    Other than that, this poem saddens me, because the whole way through you lead this on to be a solid friendship, one you admire, but in the end it turns out to be opposite, missing the spark so to say that friendships carry.

    nice write :)

    • 12 years ago

      by Nic39uy

      You know what saddens me ever more, the fact that it's happening to me as i type...she holds our friendship within the palm of her hands and i can't do anything to reason with her to listen to what i have to say...sigh -_-

      ohh and thank you Chelsey -bows- appreciate your comment and i changed up the opening sentence as well =). i knew it sound weird as i read it but didn't quite get it, that's where other poets come in and help each other get better.