Nice piece! I do have some points: |
by Wild flower
I think the contents of the poem is sad and good, so well done:) |
by Amreen
A very thoughtful write... I found it very sad and gloomy... |
This poem is mysteriously sad. I think the man is a killer or he pleasures by hurting others. What is his motive? What justification does he has for his actions? Is he having any abnormality or does he has any history of pshyce problem? Its a deep piece, seem like a scene in a thriller movie. You can broaden it a bit, so we know his plot. I like how you progressed in telling this mans story. Its gets one eager to get to the other line, anticipating randomly. A good theme, keep it up!. Meri hindi tora tora hai. ;) .. |
by Boy
No yakori. i just tried to create the idea, the bench the lamp the lonely road and the sad man. |
Firs of all: WOW! on the title. It's long but totally attention grabbing. Love it. |
by Boy
Thanks for your suggestions really very helpful for me |