Shattered Thoughts...

I bang my fists against the post
while searching for a ray of hope,
shattered thoughts are words
unspoken, so much hate
I feel so broken.

- good opening, it sets the emotion and how you are struggling to cope with what is going on in your head right now.

Planted are the seeds of doubt.
Their roots so deep they won't
come out. Crying loud but no one
hears, muffled by my secret fears.

- the loneliness in here stands out and perhaps the hidden secrets you keep which is casuign all this pain.

These still pictures in your mind,
frozen in a place in time.
Some are good, and some are bad,
some you wish you never had.

- totally agree, they all hit you at once and get jumbled up and it is never easy to just focus on the good, or just the bad. Great stanza.

All the wretched scars I bare,
from living in so much despair.
Holding on I don't know why.
There is no glint left in my eyes.

- this is so sad, you always tell the sandess in someone through their eyes, the thought of eyes no longer shining, it is like the soul inside has given up, it has been too badly hurt.

A hollow stare is all you
see when you are looking
back at me. A cosmic mistake
was my birth, leaving me
with no self-worth.

- the hollow stare - an image which is easy to see. You also give here a part of the past which has left you feeling so low of your self worth.

A smile is a woken dream,
something oh so dear to me.
A carousel of my emotions,
like waves that crash
out in the ocean.

- good use of the waves here, we straight away think of the stormy sea crashing on the rocks which is what it must be like inside of you right now with these emotions.

My shattered thoughts are words unspoken...

- I like your choice to repeat this, as it is really what your poem is expressing. It is also a very powerful statement leaving the reader with a lot of empathy as many of us have been here too.

I liked the ryhming and layout, for me this is one of my favourite types of poetry. I enjoy reading them and you have got the flow to fit perfect with the ryhme. Great job.

Ummmm yeah, loved it @_@!

Nominated :-)

Nice thought! I guess that your penning is going to grow more in the future. Day-by-day I'm sure you'll be able to write your own masterpiece some day. Enjoyed reading your poem.