Verbage (syntuit)

by Larry Chamberlin   Sep 20, 2012


Clusters of words don't
add meaning only disguise
my understanding.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Simplicity is the key in certain poems...I find myself searching for too much and loosing the whole essence of what I am trying to write about.

    Larry, you just know too much.
    x

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Love this senryu!!!

    What I love about these short forms, is that you have to say a lot more in less words. You've done that here. I love the title - I think that was a clever word to use.

    I like the concept of this poem... the idea that a jumble of descriptive words may not add meaning to enhance the understanding of a subject. It also reminded of when you're writing an essay or report and how rambling about unnecessary things is usually not going to add to the essay/report, other than the word count.

    I love the simplicity and theme of this poem. Great job Godfather!

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Most of the time, that's true. Choking verses with words and stuffing them with spicy thesaurus vocab can make you pass a lot of gas! It gets irritating to the stomach and eyes and tongue I mean. Instead of enjoying the imagery, one has to force himself to gulp the idea down his throat.

    But in rare situations, what you wrote isn't 100% true. I am reading now A Thousand Splendid Suns, and Khaled Hosseini's style is so attractive because he describes a lot and adds so many adjectives just to make us define and shape in mind the settings and characters of his story. It's not pain in the ass to me!!

    - Love this write. Always keep sharing those meaningful senryus - Rock On!

  • 12 years ago

    by Nema

    Did you mean me in this poem? Because I feel like this almost all the time.
    I really love this piece Larry, the theme is very convenient to the form. Like you don't need many words to talk about 'words'.

    Great write :)
    Write on~

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