Weeping Willow....

The willow tree is crying,
somber weeping in
his soul. His tears forever
falling and he cannot
be consoled.

- :O... wow. I cannot believe how touching this is already in such a few short lines. It really clutches you deep and hits you immediatly in the heart. To imagine someones pain to continue without being comforted, the feeling of such loneliness is just so powerful and you done amazing expressing this.

What has the willow lost,
that has his caused him
so much pain. To be
forever weeping, as his
tear drops hang
in vain.

- I think you need to take out the word his in the second line as it should read : that has caused him.

- again, with this second verse it hits you so deep and then wonder what the reason for his sadness is. I adore this write so much and even through your title you know this is going to be a touching poem.

I love this poem so much and as much as I would have liked to read more of it, it stands so strong just being this length.

Amazing job!

:-(........ wow! Maples weep too....

This poem was elegant and beautifully sad! Anytime I read a tree poem, and I can feel the authors emotions pour out within the lines... than you can bet your booty Im gonna stand up and applaud you!!!!!!! *WHOOOOOOT*

......awesome awesome awesome!!!!!

Not the most constructive coment id admit but this rhymer is just wonderful.....you know
Maple Tree is gonna flip when she reads this lol

Great write dude :-)