Scared Silent

I admit that I have been reading your work for several weeks and I have wanted to comment badly but it is so very hard to let the wall down long enough to do so....

However, I wanted you to know that your work brings tears to my eyes almost every time. I feel like I am reading excerpts from my own life, albeit it may not be my current life but I've lived it all the same, and still re-live it each day because it has forever altered me and still affects every moment of my life.

"Her voice is absent but her crimson tears
represent her pain.
Trapped and tortured in a dark situation
too complex to explain"

It's not something that really can be explained, even if you could use your voice, it falls on deaf ears because it is so damn easy for someone to say, "just leave," as if it were that easy. If people only knew the silent shame that this life entails.

"This is the consequence she suffers with
for letting her tears drop.
She hears a sudden crack as her rib snaps
with unbearable familiar pain.
Just one of his reminders of damage to be endured
if her voice speaks out."

The consequence for showing "weakness." It's like fuel to the fire for the other person, the pain and the feeble attempts at trying to speak out only add to the overall power of the villain.

"Isolated and alone she suffers in silence
with this soul-destroying burden"

It's a burden that cannot be shared and I understand the need for isolation.

"She relies on her pen to express how she feels,
releasing her inner fears.
She closes her book and hides it away
in a place no one can find."

This is the part that really hits home. I relate to this so much and it pains me to know that we share the same inspiration for writing, thank you for sharing, as f'd up as this all is, there are people who read this and know that they are not alone in their suffering.

Your words are powerful and I love your work.

Sorry for the double post.

I admit that I have been reading your work for several weeks and I have wanted to comment badly but it is so very hard to let the wall down long enough to do so....

However, I wanted you to know that your work brings tears to my eyes almost every time. I feel like I am reading excerpts from my own life, albeit it may not be my current life but I've lived it all the same, and still re-live it each day because it has forever altered me and still affects every moment of my life.

"Her voice is absent but her crimson tears
represent her pain.
Trapped and tortured in a dark situation
too complex to explain"

It's not something that really can be explained, even if you could use your voice, it falls on deaf ears because it is so damn easy for someone to say, "just leave," as if it were that easy. If people only knew the silent shame that this life entails.

"This is the consequence she suffers with
for letting her tears drop.
She hears a sudden crack as her rib snaps
with unbearable familiar pain.
Just one of his reminders of damage to be endured
if her voice speaks out."

The consequence for showing "weakness." It's like fuel to the fire for the other person, the pain and the feeble attempts at trying to speak out only add to the overall power of the villain.

"Isolated and alone she suffers in silence
with this soul-destroying burden"

It's a burden that cannot be shared and I understand the need for isolation.

"She relies on her pen to express how she feels,
releasing her inner fears.
She closes her book and hides it away
in a place no one can find."

This is the part that really hits home. I relate to this so much and it pains me to know that we share the same inspiration for writing, thank you for sharing, as f'd up as this all is, there are people who read this and know that they are not alone in their suffering.

Your words are powerful and I love your work.

Saffie, once again you have awed me.

The fear just evident right at the beginning... cowering in the corner pleading for her life. :( From the beginning, the reader know this is going to be a tear jerker!

I love the next stanza, voice is silent but her crimson tears showed her pain. Why didn't I think of that line? I'm jealous lol.

I see lots of imagery coming next... the struggle as you try to get free from his hands as he squeezes his neck. I swear, reading your poetry is like watching a Lifetime movie for me... I can see every single thing happening.

The abuser never wants the victim to cry... it always results in more punishment... but seriously, how could you not cry? Being hurt physically and so much emotionally... ugh.

Now this is where it caught me... he allows his friends to beat as well!!!! There are seriously some sick people in this world. :/

I love how you added that writing is her escape...she can express her feelings and just get totally lost in her poetry. I think we all can relate to that... no matter how much our struggles differ.

The ending is amazing. Praying that he will never find it because she knows she will be punished greatly for it.

This is beautiful and just so emotional. You have a way with words that just captures the reader til the very end...and even beyond... looking for your newest entry! hahaha..

great job, saffie... truly great.

Saffie, wtf? I'm kinda stunned by this poem. I feel it was so much deeper than your usual writes, in fact this was quite flawless. Such a sad story you described here which happens often to women who are raped, sold as sex slaves, or in a domestic violent relationship. I hate that men are stronger and think they are superior than us because they can beat us and we can't fight back. It makes me mad hearing stories or seeing that happen to people.

I love how the poem ended with hoping he never sees this poem, because its clear it'd get her another beating....

Seriously a heart breaking write!

Sighs....... Saffie your deeply heartfelt emotions can be felt with intensity of this write! sad and heartbreaking, but so elegantly beautiful!!