Canson's

- thank you for explaining this title as I wasnt sure what it was. This was very clever Maple... I think it will be safe to say no one else would ever have this title for a poem!

If the morning sun
stopped rising
upon a cascading
landscape,
then I would
never know
the true meaning
of loving you.

- do you know I actually paused after reading this, then instead of reading on I went back and read this again. I think it is so touching and powerful, it could actually have been a poem on it's own. It really touched me and the thought of this for someone close, it is just very moving Maple.

Our darkness
consumes
a light bulb,
squelching
the electricity,
flickering
.
.
on
.
and
.
.
off

- you are just showing off here. This layout was excellent for this shaped poem. But even without the shape, the way it is layed out just works so well! The battle here betweeen the light and dark is so fierce, it is like both are so strong. In my head I imagine the light being hope and the darkness being the illness(es) and the struggle you have with both of them. So moving!

But the
sun shall
set
each day for us
and our darkness
will go away
by morning
my love....

- Maple this is so touching, it has got me very teary and reaching a part of my heart which I keep closed off but your poem is making this open.

All I can say is I will be reading this poem a lot more than just tonight. And from that place in my heart, I thank you for having the talent to write this and the bravery to share it. xxx

Now... about your shape... I am stuck, I love concrete ( shaped ) poetry because everyone see's somethig different. For me i see a light bulb hanging from the ceiling. But I could not help but turn my laptop upside down and my eyes saw a rose in a vase. Which made me think the shape could also represent an upside down rose because when the darkness sets in, it just turns everything in your life upside down until the light is back on. So i love both these idea's even if none were intended.

I think this is one of my favourite from you xx

Wow
Miss newyork this is amazing and heartbreaking a lot of people will be able to relate to this I loved your words I love the flow it's all perfect

Well done

I love the way you show off.

on
.
.
and
.
.
off

This wordplay sealed the deal for me.

I love it.

Beautiful!

You know, I was expecting some Parkinson facades in there. I think they are showcased in the On..Off...On..Off ? as if the same shaky movement of hands, for example?

Anyway, that was an original title. I would've loved to see some more things about the two diseases, but it's still beautiful, the way it is.

Amazingly done.

I was intrigued by the title so I had to open it up...and I absolutely love the creativity of adding Cancer & Parkinson's together. Two very horrible diseases.

I love the layout of the poem, especially the on and off part. It truly works great with the meaning of this poem.

The beauty in feeling sadness is best felt when one can put them in the right words in such a way that your eyes never leave the poem. Andrea, this is what I see and feel in your composition here. An extraordinary attempt to put the love held within despite the darkness. The hope for a morning sun, despite the threat of a permanent sunset each night. Our lives revolve around the love we recieve from others, the love we give back each day we are with them and the vibes that we derive from this love we hold for each other. Each day we get energized from seeing the sun rise, .......bury our fears, our darkness.
So, I can imagine if the sun failed to rise one day, what gloom we will be in.
So well written, deeply meaningful and touching.

This was exremely sad but I also felt a sense of hope in it that...the sun may rise once more and you will have another day to spend together. The impression I got from your words is that each of these people encourage the other to keep going because of the love they share and....when one is feeling off colour the other finds the strength to nurture them. Neither want to leave the other and that's probably why they are both still on this earth....sometimes love is stronger than any medication.

Very creative title BTW.