The Tears

Such a sad write. But I like it.

I really like the off-beat tempo that you have written in throughout the piece. I don't whether it flows or not - because syllablically (Yeah, I made that up, lol) it doesn't, but on the other hand you have a kept up the rhythm throughout which makes it flow -- if that makes sense, lol.

I also like the repetition you have used - well executed, and I like how you didn't use exact repeats but changed it up slightly each time, which kept it different throughout the piece. It also added emphasis to the sadness you were feeling at the time of writing this - and the many tears you have shed.

I liked the second statement - how the rivers of tears were 'wider than the sea' -- it really made things clear as to how hard and fast you were crying at the time, how much emotion you were expressing with those tears. It also has some great imagery.

Weirdly enough with the first couplet I actually pictured waterfalls instead of tears -- so it kind of brought nature into the mix. Maybe they were waterfalls on that mountain with the faces --I can't remember the name, lol. Rushmore? Anyway...

I like the metaphor of the stone - strong and heavy - you've made it to mean that the tears are somewhat unstoppable because they are unbreakable (unable to break the cycle of tears that is).

^^ In saying that, I think possibly an 'a' should be before stone because I feel like it's slightly out of sync of your off-beat tempo. But not a big deal.

Also... and again, I'm just being absolutely totally picky because I can't find much to critique on otherwise... in the fourth couplet stanza, 'ok' should be 'okay' LOL
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Told you I was being picky, hehe. That's what your writing does to me, makes me think outside the box, lol

I really love that last line - tears flooding the heart - the meaning and reality really slams into the reader (not literally thank god) of how much emotion, sadness, that you are feeling.
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It just makes me want to give you a big hug.

Another excellent write. (: