I'm going to take this poem as being a result of a recent conversation we had? If it is I so wish I could just vent it all out but...for some reason I just can't...anyway...onto this poem....I'm not even going to count it out because I'm sure it will be correct so...

Now this is something that we didn't speak about but....these are my thoughts..

Shove
me in
a box full
of stale, moth balls,
label this feeble
old brain, geriatric,
simply lock this heart away,
within a musty chest up high,
for in the attic I shall reside
waiting for my secrets to be revealed.

My experience is this, and this is what I'm basing this interpretation on....so many families imigrate to other lands and decide to bring elderly family members with them and...they just don't adapt so...9 times out of 10 they are shoved in aged care centres where they just give up.. for they yearn for their old neighbourhood, familiar things etc and....it's all in a small box which they probably don't even have access to......

You are correct Hellon!! After our powerful conversation I wanted to write the feelings I have received on this subject through my peoples eyes... I feel like I have the gift to write and I wanted to express thier feelings and frustration..... thank you for your awesome comment!

Wow.woW

I think Hellon nailed it on the head when it came to praising this.

But it is a beautiful poem! I love the style of it. :) The flow was just wondrous.

Yay love this piece, how it looks and everything about it:)
Awesome poem

Lol. So I know it's not a funny poem.. but I can't help but laugh. This sounds like something my grandpa would have said to me. He always said 'but I'm old dangit!" when he didn't want to do something (like go to the doctor lol). So the first half brought back some really fond and funny memories for me. :)

Now taking this poem seriously -- it's sad. I feel like it's about watching someone go through alzheimers (sp?) or something similar, where they don't know what's happening to them anymore. Diseases like that absolutely break my heart. The part about locking in the attic with secrets for others (or something like that, the poem isn't on screen lol) was just so.. gut wrenching?

I felt like this was one of the first times I've read this form and felt like it wasn't forced. I think you really executed this very well. :)

The only suggestion I would have is to remove the comma before geriatric. It read better to me when I didn't pause there. :)

Love this!