I love your new style as of late, the different stanzas broken up I feel have such a great effect on what youre saying in each write, it makes such a huge impact. You have one creative imagination, I love the piano keys as legs thought, so different & lovely. Well done again (:

I agree with courageous dreamer the way you structured the stanza separation had a great effect when reading. I also found the last two stanzas powerful even though they had two - one word they are words with reflective authority that makes to link to the stanzas above. I love the metaphorical tone of the piano and how it links to the situation of life and the story flowing through, it takes the reader on a journey. A very captivating poem that kept me interested the whole way through, firstly drawn me in by the title.
well penned!
5.5

Ummm. Maryanne? Whats happened to your style? Lol, this is so different but OMG so incredible.

I felt suuuch sadness when reading this poem. I like how you broke it up with roman numerals, I've actually seen a lot of people do that and it doesn't always really work, but here it was really effective. It's definitely a brand new chapter each time, adding suspense.

I feel like the first stanza, first and second (half) line are a big backwards. But maybe not. lol I can't decide which way I personify better, changing it to "my legs are piano keys" or the way you have it. I guess it all reads the same but I can't decide which has a stronger effect... keep going back and forth.

The part about the Bermuda Triangle, I have to say I am sad I didn't think that first, lol. This is really a beautiful and touching poem.. ah. You write your best work late at night :) Love it!

You are so brilliant. I know I tell you that in every comment, but you really are.

I love listing in the first stanza what you are. Then in the second stanza following up with what he does to each of those things you previously listed. The metaphors were awesome.

I loved that your fourth and fifth roman numerals were only one word. So different, very effective. Definitely love this structure Maryanne, you're nailing it :)