It was beautiful and well writen, and hits home for me

So this was my favourite , I really thought this would of won I loved every word and the ending was so heartbreaking an amazing piece of writing

5/5

Nomination!!

Baby R what the crap!! I keep finding out who wrote the poems for the club challenge and again, I was shocked! This was so awesome, this poem was on my top 3 that I struggled with when voting.

I loved that you kind of trick the reader in the beginning and write as if that person is there, but your ending you say the reason youre staring is because they actually aren't there, and you are just imagining them. That is so sad, and so awesome to me!

Excellent job, I love what your writing is turning into, amazing pieces! You truly are growing as a poet!

You know this poem really broke my heart.

It is certainly a love poem but there is a deep sadness that has touched me completely.

When you talked about moving his arms and making them wrap around you so you can lie on his chest, I smiled because I do that with my husband. I end up grabbing his arms and then falling asleep on him hoping he would caress me too.

I was in a state of happiness reading that part but when it came to the end of the poem my heart dropped. I felt like crying because this overwhelming feeling of lonliness came rushing through me.

Awesome write hun but very sad

x

I was like this is so sweet and cute and happy, and I love the way you described everything, until .... You broke my heart with the ending :(

But I still love it all, even with the twist at the end it still shows a great deal of emotions.

Amazing sweetie :)

xxx

Wow!!

Yeah that one hit home.... You just did a "naughtymouse" on me & made me cry!

Very well executed!

& bless you if this poem wasn't just for a challenge?! :) 5/5