I really love the sentiment behind this poem. So often people try to be someone, anyone else, than exactly who they are. I am of the belief we are as God intended and that we need to be okay with that. We need to understand we are created a specific way for certain reasons. This was a really great message here.

The only suggestion is the beginning.. I would eliminate the repetition of "her" in each beginning line. I think it would hold a stronger effect without them. :)

Great piece, a strong and very emotionally charged write. I love the message behind it, to live for yourself no matter what others want/think. I really like how you start it and then write "But things will change." That is really powerful and gets the message across big time. To continuously believing in yourself and striving to be the person that this girl is meant to be you were vividly and excellently able to piece her emotions together in such a graceful way.
I ADORE the last sentence..
"Believe in yourself...
You are strong,
You are true
and no matter what life brings
YOU will push through!"
It has such fire and fight within each word, to conquer the negativity and push through to be happy and be the person she's meant to become. Real powerful, reminds me of something Otep would write.
5/5

This is definitely very inspirational. You really speak to the reader so well here and impact them with your words. I love how you capitalized YOU in the poem, it truly emphasizes everything and brings it all together. We must not forget to be us and nothing but that, we should not let others opinons get us down. A poem of simplicity yet it grabs the readers attention & lifts them up. Love the optimism.

This is truth a deep message that a lot of people will relate to , the emotion and straight worded made it a very powerful piece , in time you read poems that will help people and maybe even save a life , this is one of them awesome

Okay, so for some reason I read this like they were song lyrics. It was great! I could really see these sung to a rhythm because you had slight rhyming throughout the piece.

I love the message behind this poem. It made me think of that quote, "be yourself because everyone else is take." I LOVE that! I just nodded throughout the whole piece because I agreed with everything you said.

Wonderfully written!

I agree with Bliss- I read this as lyrics, and oh what a wonderful and inspiring song this would make!

Your opening verse makes me think on someone utterly lost and broken, and not knowing what she should so anymore-overcome with the bad things in life. This prepares me for a very sad poem and yet in the next line you manage to completely turn that around and leave me wondering.

The positive message throughout this is incredible- aren't we all guilty of listening to others instead of ourselves? And too often, many people make the mistake of -continuing- to listen and believe the negative thoughts of others instead of bettering themselves and remembering that they are just as good as the ones that put them down to begin with.

This poem makes me smile, it makes me think "Hey you know what? Screw my haters! Just keep on doing what you are doing! "

"Life will get better when you start to believe it"

Favourite line. Cliche as it is, it -is- true that positive thinking leads to positive results and you capture that wonderfully.

"You believe in you". I loved the repetition of you and how you emphasized it so beautifully....reminding people we are in control of our lives, and we can choose to be happy in what we do.

"Feel free to live your life
without the strain of peoples lies."

~ Very motivational and so true....it's easy and doesn't take much to be worn down by the people we surround ourselves with...I know I vent about people at school who are constantly being negative w/ each word they say. And then the people who lie, it's like why do that to ourselves? Why not live the truth.

Beautiful piece, so joyful to read, keep writing :)

When mind is made up, win is close. Nothing comes true, outside Belief. Imitation, is worst deceit. Very beautifully worded!

Imitation ridicules worth. Where focus is gained, strife is lost.

All I can say about this is I LOVE it!

Very good message- if only more people thought like this. Life is hard and a lot of people lack confidence in themselves and in their abilities, whereas they should embrace who they are and be proud of it. Wonderful message, nice poem :)