This is really good but, for some reason I feel there could of been more power on the words |
I like the simplicity of this poem. :P |
by Chelsey
Oh mer gerd!! I loved this!! I pictured you writing in chalk a poem , boldy, on the sidewalks and rain washing it away ...making us feel like what we say doesn't matter, or what we feel needs to go away...I loved the short simple message in this piece. |
by Hellon
I like the title...chalk was very big when I was a child and....it wasn't used just on a blackboard.....my first thought when I read this was chalking out beds....I'm not sure what you would have called them but...you used to get a can...again I would call it a peever but...hope you get what I'm talking about...hopscotsh maybe? Anyway as I got older chalk was also used to tell every boy in the street that I loved them at some point so....very thankful for the rain when I got older....another bit of chalk...another hotscotch bed...another love....oh..how I loved my chalk back then haha!!! Loved the rain more I will add :) |
by Wild flower
Well I can turn the message to the exact opposite meaning, maybe writing on the sidewalks sad poems with chalk, so when the rain comes it washes the sadness you held in :) |
by Baby Rainbow
Very thoughy provoking maple for so little words. Now you will make my mind boggle on this some more. |
The title. I loved the simplicity of this title. I think (after reading the poem) it certainly fits perfectly. Also, I like how, because of it's simplicity, readers don't know really know what to expect when they first open it. I like that surprise, and brief anticipation. |